This is an astonishingly confident and accomplished piece of writing; you should be very proud of yourself. I loved how you played around with the chronology, giving out just enough information so we'd keep reading, while holding back key points for later. Somehow, this dreamlike, disjointed style allows you to say something much more powerful about grief and memory than a more prosaic third person effort would have done.
The line about her smile being plastered on as though someone had stuck it there was memorable, as was the picture of her calling on House in her sweatshirt with no makeup on. Even little Morgan comes across as a real personality and not just a plot device. And I liked the subtle, background sketching in of Wilson's nervous breakdown.
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Date: 2006-06-11 07:50 am (UTC)Somehow, this dreamlike, disjointed style allows you to say something much more powerful about grief and memory than a more prosaic third person effort would have done.
The line about her smile being plastered on as though someone had stuck it there was memorable, as was the picture of her calling on House in her sweatshirt with no makeup on. Even little Morgan comes across as a real personality and not just a plot device. And I liked the subtle, background sketching in of Wilson's nervous breakdown.
Terrific work!